被哈佛相中的Essay范文

范文作者：Marina

原籍 : 美国北卡州

高中: 公立高中, 50毕业生

民族: 西语裔

性别: 女性

GPA: 4.98 out of 5.0

SAT / ACT: 35

SAT2: Mathematics Level 2, Physics

课外活动: Research, founing science fair mentoring irector, founing Eitor-in-Chief of stuent newspaper, beach volleyball, funraising artist

获奖: Intel International Science an Engineering Fair Finalist, US Public Health Surgeon General's Special Science Awar, National Hispanic Scholar, Jack Kent Cooke Semifinalist, Wayne Hanson Excellence in Science or Engineering Awar

专业: Math

文书

My father sai I in’t cry when I was born. Instea, I poppe out of the womb with a furrowe brow, looking up at him almost accusatorially, as if to say “Who are you? What am I oing here?” While I can’t speak to the biological accuracy of his story — How i I survive, then? How i I bring air into my lungs? — it’s certainly true that I feel like I came preprogramme with the compulsion to ask questions.

I receive my first journal in preschool, probably because my parents were sick of cleaning my crayon rawings off my beroom wall. Growing up, my notebooks became the places where I explore ieas through actions in aition to wors. If the face I was sketching looke brooy, I began to woner what in her life mae her that way. Was she a spy? Di she just come in from the col? Grauating from crayons to markers to colore pencils, I layere color upon color, testing out the effects of ifferent combinations, wonering why the layering of notes in music fille me with the very same happiness as the sight of the explosion of paire colors beneath my hans.

I began to take notes, on anything an everything. Reaing Steve Martin’s Born Staning Up, I took away lessons on presentations, of maintaining a rhythm an allowing crescenos of energy to release every so often. While watching a ocumentary on people preparing for a sommelier exam, I mae note of the importance of an enriching environment where most everything points you to your goals. Flipping through my ol journal, I see that even an article about trouble in the South China Sea inspire notes on preceent an maintaining traition lest you provoke the unknown. I was looking for the rules of the worl.

More than just a place to catalogue my observations about the worl, my notebooks are places to synthesize, to course-correct, to pinpoint areas for iterative improvement. When the wors are own on paper, I see my patterns of thought an the holes in my logic stark against the white page. If I have a ay of insecurity that leas to a suen rush of journaling characteristic of that in a teen movie, looking own at the angsty scribbles, I'll recognize my repeate thoughts an actions an look for pressure points in that system of behavior where I can improve.

Now my 2016 notebook returns to exploring the worl through actions an experiments. Dozens of oughnut-shape sketches ot pages that ask “how woul you play tic-tac-toe on a torus?” Another page containing bubble letters answers the simpler question of the result of sorting these figures into groups of topological equivalences. Not two pages later are the results of a research binge on Mersenne primes that took me through perfect numbers an somehow eposite me at a Wikipeia page etailing the mathematical properties of the number 127. Once again, I look for the rules of the worl.

Whenever I feel iscourage, I look to my stack of notebooks, shelve neatly by my esk. In those pages I’ve learne that I have room to fail an grow, to literally turn over a new leaf if a problem is particularly tricky. Through years of scribbling away, I’ve learne that the most funamental part of my evelopment has been giving myself the space to try: to sketch mangle faces, to raw the wrong conclusions, to answer a question incorrectly, an to learn from my mistakes without shame. I look to that mass of notebooks fille with my ieas, my mistakes, an my questions, an I'm remine that I’ve grown before, an that I’ll grow again, all the while asking questions.

哈佛校报点评

玛丽娜（Marina）的开场白立即吸引了读者的注意，尽管没有立即看出与主题有何联系，直到讲述她的小品表演。 从学前班开始，她通过记录趣事来保存笔记本。 尽管她的文章像是浪漫的散文，但她避免了跑题。

当她翻阅笔记本时，她追踪她的思考过程——从最初收集信息到最终合成并建立在她的观察上。尽管在第三段中所记笔记的例子在增加细节和重复之间多走了一步，但它们加深了读者对笔记本的理解。我们注意到她表现出成长的心态，因为她指出她将笔记本用作处理思想和寻找需要改进的地方。

玛丽娜（Marina）以一篇积极的，扎实的笔记结束了她的文章，使作文的内容更进一步显示了她成长的心态。她的结束语回到 “提问” 一词，展示了一幅完整的图像，强调了文章的主题。

温馨提示：同学们收藏学习哦，祝各位都能收获梦校的录取！范文作者：Marina

原籍 : 美国北卡州

高中: 公立高中, 50毕业生

民族: 西语裔

性别: 女性

GPA: 4.98 out of 5.0

SAT / ACT: 35

SAT2: Mathematics Level 2, Physics

课外活动: Research, founing science fair mentoring irector, founing Eitor-in-Chief of stuent newspaper, beach volleyball, funraising artist

获奖: Intel International Science an Engineering Fair Finalist, US Public Health Surgeon General's Special Science Awar, National Hispanic Scholar, Jack Kent Cooke Semifinalist, Wayne Hanson Excellence in Science or Engineering Awar

专业: Math

文书

My father sai I in’t cry when I was born. Instea, I poppe out of the womb with a furrowe brow, looking up at him almost accusatorially, as if to say “Who are you? What am I oing here?” While I can’t speak to the biological accuracy of his story — How i I survive, then? How i I bring air into my lungs? — it’s certainly true that I feel like I came preprogramme with the compulsion to ask questions.

I receive my first journal in preschool, probably because my parents were sick of cleaning my crayon rawings off my beroom wall. Growing up, my notebooks became the places where I explore ieas through actions in aition to wors. If the face I was sketching looke brooy, I began to woner what in her life mae her that way. Was she a spy? Di she just come in from the col? Grauating from crayons to markers to colore pencils, I layere color upon color, testing out the effects of ifferent combinations, wonering why the layering of notes in music fille me with the very same happiness as the sight of the explosion of paire colors beneath my hans.

I began to take notes, on anything an everything. Reaing Steve Martin’s Born Staning Up, I took away lessons on presentations, of maintaining a rhythm an allowing crescenos of energy to release every so often. While watching a ocumentary on people preparing for a sommelier exam, I mae note of the importance of an enriching environment where most everything points you to your goals. Flipping through my ol journal, I see that even an article about trouble in the South China Sea inspire notes on preceent an maintaining traition lest you provoke the unknown. I was looking for the rules of the worl.

More than just a place to catalogue my observations about the worl, my notebooks are places to synthesize, to course-correct, to pinpoint areas for iterative improvement. When the wors are own on paper, I see my patterns of thought an the holes in my logic stark against the white page. If I have a ay of insecurity that leas to a suen rush of journaling characteristic of that in a teen movie, looking own at the angsty scribbles, I'll recognize my repeate thoughts an actions an look for pressure points in that system of behavior where I can improve.

Now my 2016 notebook returns to exploring the worl through actions an experiments. Dozens of oughnut-shape sketches ot pages that ask “how woul you play tic-tac-toe on a torus?” Another page containing bubble letters answers the simpler question of the result of sorting these figures into groups of topological equivalences. Not two pages later are the results of a research binge on Mersenne primes that took me through perfect numbers an somehow eposite me at a Wikipeia page etailing the mathematical properties of the number 127. Once again, I look for the rules of the worl.

Whenever I feel iscourage, I look to my stack of notebooks, shelve neatly by my esk. In those pages I’ve learne that I have room to fail an grow, to literally turn over a new leaf if a problem is particularly tricky. Through years of scribbling away, I’ve learne that the most funamental part of my evelopment has been giving myself the space to try: to sketch mangle faces, to raw the wrong conclusions, to answer a question incorrectly, an to learn from my mistakes without shame. I look to that mass of notebooks fille with my ieas, my mistakes, an my questions, an I'm remine that I’ve grown before, an that I’ll grow again, all the while asking questions.

哈佛校报点评

玛丽娜（Marina）的开场白立即吸引了读者的注意，尽管没有立即看出与主题有何联系，直到讲述她的小品表演。 从学前班开始，她通过记录趣事来保存笔记本。 尽管她的文章像是浪漫的散文，但她避免了跑题。

当她翻阅笔记本时，她追踪她的思考过程——从最初收集信息到最终合成并建立在她的观察上。尽管在第三段中所记笔记的例子在增加细节和重复之间多走了一步，但它们加深了读者对笔记本的理解。我们注意到她表现出成长的心态，因为她指出她将笔记本用作处理思想和寻找需要改进的地方。

玛丽娜（Marina）以一篇积极的，扎实的笔记结束了她的文章，使作文的内容更进一步显示了她成长的心态。她的结束语回到 “提问” 一词，展示了一幅完整的图像，强调了文章的主题。

温馨提示：同学们收藏学习哦，祝各位都能收获梦校的录取！