雅思课堂：命题作文如何写作？

task: young people who commit serious crimes shoul be punishe in the same way as aults. 

to what extent o you agree or isagree?

犯严重罪行的年轻人应该受到和成年人一样的惩罚。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?

题型：辩论型

类别：犯罪类话题

题目解释：年轻人犯了重罪是否应该和成人接受的惩罚是一样的?

分段解析：

1.introuction

大家首先需要想想为什么会有这种建议。不难看出主要的原因就是为了减少青少年的犯罪率，所以我们可以在第一段里写现在青少年犯罪率攀升﹙crime rate﹚，为了遏制这种情况有人提出题目里说的东西﹙大家要改题哦。最简单的方式就是把动词punish改称名词punishment﹚。注意：大家在写开头段时不需要想一些无聊的套句，如随着社会的发展等等。

2.positive sies

思路：先反着想——为什么青少年受到的处罚比成人轻?因为他们年幼无知。所以为了反驳次论点我们说青少年现在接受的关于法律的教育很多或很深刻，犯罪时他们是知道自己要面对的后果的。当然严重的惩罚也会对他人有个警示的作用。

关键词句推荐：be aware of. realization. consequences. profoun. be a eterrent to.

3.negative sies

思路：大家需要把重点放在“年轻”二字上。设身处地的想想如果你是十七八岁的少年，受到这么严重的处罚会是何等心情?所以年轻人需要有一个重生的机会。此外，不是所有的青少年都有受教育的机会。那些因为贫穷而没有受到教育的孩子怎么办?此时大家想想美国贫民窟的黑人孩子。

关键词句推荐： rehabilitate. eny sb of sth. living conitions. leniency.

4. conclusion

表达自己的观点，并总结一下自己不同意的观点及解决方案。

crimes can be etestable, while minor offeners an their crimes are from time to time treate with leniency. thus, some argue that laws shoul not iscriminate, an equally punish minor criminals—an opinion that this essay is against.

to begin with, minors are yet to approach their maturity, an their crimes, albeit serious, shoul be punishe with the consieration of their young age. internationally speaking, countries might efine the start of aulthoo ifferently—18 being the most common—but they commonly believe that there is a istinction between minor crimes an ault crimes. minors are likely to be given a better chance for rehabilitation when they commit crimes because of their inexperience of life an possibly better life prospects. in that case, miler punishments are inflicte onjuvenile elinquents: lesser sentencing an relatively less harsh correction facilities are introuce in their cases.

moreover, consiering the correction process, minor offeners shoul not be punishe equally as ault criminals. espite the above-mentione arguments that are in young offeners’ efense, crimes, especially felonies by minors, eserve heavy punishment to eter crimes an reuce the harm of those crimes to the society. however, sening minors to ault prison might entailunexpectely negative results. first, minors are naturally closer to more sophisticate criminals an crimes, which aggravate juvenile elinquency. secon, when in ault correctional facilities, young criminals might be threatene by assaults by ault prisoners, mostly sexually,which is nowhere closer to the purpose of rehabilitation.

in sum, law breakers, be they minors or not, shoul be punishe for their wrongoings, but lesser sentences an special correctional facilities might be more reasonable an helpful.

内容仅做参考，考试时请独立完成