英国留学申请文书，这几个雷区一定要避开！

英国留学攻略之文书篇：如何写好个人陈述的开头

1、重复简历型

I earne my Bachelor of Science egree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2012 at … university, which provie me with a profoun backgroun in atmospheric science. During this perio, I receive Outstaning Stuent Scholarship for my excellent performance in the acaemic fiel. I foun that …is abstruse an intereste, an there are so many things I i not unerstan. Thus I ecie to learn more.

英国留学申请的文书中个人陈述中不要去重复简历上的东西，这在很多学校的PS要求中有明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不是单纯地重复已有的内容。

2、学校介绍型

I am an unergrauate in…University , the largest university ana crale of scientific an technological talents in China. (…… University is a prestigious university of general eucation with 20 epartments an a regular annual enrollment of 8,000 stuents ) I stuie at ……(E. E) Department, ahighly selective epartment with a gathering of smart stuents who are har to compete with.

该同学的开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒拒掉。

3、抄袭句式型

As a stuent majoring in Computer Science, I began my oyssey since Ientere unergrauate program. Inee, having entere this spleni computer worl, I am more than greey for something new.

Oyssey 和more than greey for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学有用过。但同学们要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜欢原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧!

4、救世主型

I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kin of instincts to solvevarious problems before me an enjoy oing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from Presient Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovere aroun my min, "The worl can be change by man&aposs eneavor, … He must ever be receptive an sensitive to the new; an have sufficient courage an skill to novel facts an to eal with them." An I have been longing to be the man to face an solve novel problems.

一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。个人陈述的写作一定要个人化、具体化，别吹牛，甚至带一种霸权主义思维。

5、犹抱琵琶型

Making a right ecision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a ecision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive unerstaning of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life an analyzing my personality, I make the etermination an choose to apply for grauate stuy in XXX. An I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

重点放在自己要做的重大决定上了，人生的转折点，然后写上几句所谓名言警句。浪费字数，有限的字数里，准备英国留学的同学们应该学会直接，并且抓住重点，突出自己最有优势的方面、最有特色的方面。

6、言语幼稚型

When I was in chilhoo, I always kept asking my mom all kins of questions。I am especially intereste in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in orer to fin out its principle. So most of the things in my family has been takenapart by me, from my father. I can even fix somesimple househols, listene to other people praise, to learn science well became my ream an felt the science will accompany with me in my whole life.

一上来就回忆童年、少年时，自己有着怎样的远大抱负，谁在乎。个人陈述字数有限，却用那么多话描述童年，没有任何意义。学校想知道你如何看待未来，而不是如何度过过去。

以上这些便是冯老师为大家总结的不合适的几类开头，一个好的印象是英国留学成功的开始，大家一定要注意，打破传统的落后思维，不能再以21世纪初的low到爆的老套路去适应现在的申请新时代啦，关于文书材料写作大家有任何问题欢迎直接拨打电话找冯老师咨询！